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Thursday, February 12, 2009

Giraffe

A neck freckled more than most pulled toward me long enough,
And love coalesced all the more vulnerably and fruitful.

Borderless skies brewed with the sea’s body too mutual a gray.
Like chameleon doctrine: color reigned. I slipped even more from distinction.

Each soul needs judgment launched from stiff-stone, then truth-bruise.
More and more—upon your rocks impact—they cracked and built weight.

He whispered to me, “Celina, each giraffe-neck generation is longer than the last.”
Is then the lesson of trees to bear low fruit no more?
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  1. Tony BarnstoneFebruary 16, 2009 at 6:38 PM

    Darn! Just posted a comment and it got lost in the ether. Let's try again:

    I like it, especially the collapsed-together words, and the very cool imagery.

    Can you try to refer to yourself in the last stanza somehow?--do the "signature"?

    How about this:

    Each giraffe-neck generation is longer than the last.

    This line: "His freckled neck pulled more toward me long enough" is confusing. Rework!

    And how about
    Borderless skies brewed with the sea’s body too mutual a gray.

    Very fun!

    Tony

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