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Monday, March 23, 2009

Critical Response #2-Christina

Christina Ledesma
Advanced Poetry Writing
Professor Barnstone
Critical Response #2
March 5, 2009
Critical Response to Salta by Whitney Moore
I enjoyed the pantoum “Salta” by Whitney Moore. The images throughout her poem helped paint a picture of a beautiful landscape in Argentina. Personally, I have never been to Argentina but after reading “Salta” I was able to visualize the images in her poem through her descriptive writing. The language in her poem is very beautiful, some of the lines that stood out to me were “Green-dusted, meandering hills / Pink crossed cathedrals packed with hymns” and “Fat abuelas with coca, that chew, and spit, and smile”. The poem was written in pantoum style which helps gives it a nice rhythm. Each stanza is packed with great images so the repetition in the poem gives the reader a new visual by rearranging the lines in each stanza. I think Whitney did a good job picking and choosing the order of lines in her poem. The poem flows together beautifully and each stanza has a good transition into the next stanza. However, I do think Whitney’s poem could be better if she only focused on the strongest lines in her poem. I think if she eliminated the weakest lines and just used the strongest lines she would have a more effective poem. The poem would be stronger all around and it would help create a better visual for her reader.
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